Based off of my peer’s responses and where I want my story to go I have a few ideas on where my revision is headed. My peers were originally concerned that we did not have enough of a background on Lucia and why he was visiting Ireton and wondered if that should be mentioned earlier. My plan however is for the story to pick up as a flashback after he says his last name. Explaining why he feels so guilty about his great grandfather’s death and how he is trying to make it up to him now. From that flashback Samantha is going to speak before weaving a tale about why his great grandfather left the village, spoiler alert it’s because of his (Lucia) great great grandmother’s death. Another suggestion I received was to alter the dialogue a bit however the specific suggestion given to me makes it seem like there is forced romance when that is not what this story is about. The words spoken are not what is supposed to be focused on, the stories being told to Lucia are what my focus is.